Too Many Introductory Phrases Spoil the Essay

Hello everyone:

There seems to be an over abundance of introductory phrases these days. Whether you are a first semester freshman or a graduate student, they are omnipresent in essays. (I just wrote one in the last sentence; this proves my point, I would argue herein.) I almost wrote a second one in three sentences. That would have spelled disaster in the world of academic writing.

So how did I avoid writing more than one? I flipped my sentences around. You can do it, too. Let me show you what I mean. I was tempted, very tempted dear friends, to write the following:

Having just written one in my previous sentence, I just proved my point. [The introductory phrase is all the words before the word “sentence.”] This can be easily flipped to say:

I just proved my point, having just written one in my last sentence.

Do you see the difference? The introductory phrase is now at the end of the sentence, which keeps the essay from becoming boring.

Let’s try another one:

If I had written a second one in three sentences, it would have spelled disaster in the world of academic writing. [The introductory phrase is all of the words before the comma in the sentence right before this one.] I chose, instead, to write the sentence as two sentences. I also prevented another introductory phrase with the word “instead” by placing it after the subject and the verb (I chose), turning it into a parenthetic word. [There would have been an introductory word if I had put the word “instead” first in the sentence.]

Parenthetic words and phrases are those words and phrases that you stick into the middle of the sentence, rather than placing them at the end. Some folks argue that they don’t need any commas, which would make the sentence read as follows:

I chose instead to write the sentence as two sentences.

There’s nothing inherently wrong with the lack of commas there, but I argue that the clarity of the sentence is enhanced by the presence of the two commas. Please note that, if you use one comma, you must use the second one. Like I just did for the parenthetic expression in the previous sentence.

I hope this helps. Remember, if you have any questions about writing, just post a comment on one of my blog postings and I will get back to you.

Best,

Dr. Sheri

Do Ask Questions When You Don’t Understand

Hello Everyone:

One of the things college students sometimes fret about is whether or not to approach their professors with questions. The answer is most decisively “Yes!” Underline, boldface print, exclamation point, “Yes!”

Sometimes I am emailed by students who have misunderstood an assignment. Frequently, they are so confused that they have to ask me multiple times about what they need to do. You know what? That’s okay. I would rather spend a few extra minutes explaining an assignment in more than one way that have a student mess up an assignment whose instructions that, for some reason, have totally escaped him or her.

So, how do you do this? You write a very polite note, explaining what is confusing to you. You do not call the instructor incompetent or a moron. (Yes, I have seen it happen!) You do not complain that the instructions are fouled up beyond all belief (you may be the only person in the class who didn’t understand, so who is the fool there?).

Nope, friends, you are polite to a fault (though not Eddie Haskell polite- ask your grandmother about that cultural reference) and you calmly explain the problem. Now here’s one thing: do not wait until midnight the night before the assignment is due to ask. That is when true panic sets in and you are not going to understand a blessed thing at that late date.

Instead, you check out the assignment way beforehand and then you ask questions. Keep in mind that the instructor may explain things in class, but it’s still okay for you to ask ahead of time.

I hope this helps. And, yes, if you have a question, feel free to ask!

Best,

Dr. Sheri